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Post by BlackRainbow on Apr 6, 2005 11:09:08 GMT -5
Snarled the nose hair of grassy grieves The child of wind nest so silently breaths I see apon the grassy face A child unknown of any race
don't ask...
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Post by Aish on Apr 8, 2005 15:12:58 GMT -5
ok, lol
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Post by eapoe666 on Apr 20, 2005 22:31:58 GMT -5
"snarled the nose hair"
reminds me of a sneeze (not grieves) maybe you could do a word substitution. still rhymes at least.
Interesting, to say the least. Try to develope these few lines into something!
Kat
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Post by BlackRainbow on Apr 28, 2005 13:27:36 GMT -5
Is this better>?
Snarleded da nos hare of grassie grieves Da childe of winde neste so silentlie breathesa I ci upon the grassey fase A child unknoon of anie rase
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Apr 28, 2005 16:32:38 GMT -5
old english? no, not that.. whats that called again? i remember reading stuff like that in highschool. nice work, girl. its an interesting style. not many can pull it off.
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