cryingblood2
Crimson Soul
Born with no soul, lack of Control, cut from the mold of Antisocial
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Post by cryingblood2 on Dec 16, 2004 11:36:01 GMT -5
Okay I wrote this poem just for fun but I still wanna know what you guys think
when he touched the gun there in his pocket as he stood he became reassured that what he just done was for good...
He remembers going in the room was a SATISFACTORY white so CURIOUS, so beautiful he stepped back at first in fright
He remembers standing crowded at the window watching the random pageant of the city tardy workers rushing form the subway students heading for Louisianna University
LUCKY no one noticed him there because they would have never understood that he had to murder murder to keep some of the world good
The people that waited for her couldn't tell that her face was contorted in a smile so spurious it looked like an open wound and even those that noticed waited all the while
when it was finally his turn he noticed her brown eyes made her looksomewhat more of a southern slut even he could read between her TOXIC lies
looking at her reminded him of his lonely spontanious mother the five new dads he had a year even their red skin tight leather
do you want an autograph sir he just smiled at her - eyes filled with tears then he shot her and screamed "OOPS I SHOT BRITNEY SPEARS"
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Post by Yossarian on Dec 16, 2004 16:24:53 GMT -5
clever...are all of the CAPITALized words britney spears songs?
the last two lines made me laugh....you have a real talent with words, cryingblood.
nice work!
yossarian
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Post by Kitten on Dec 16, 2004 18:51:09 GMT -5
There should be a new poetry forum for humorous poems!
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Post by Yossarian on Dec 16, 2004 20:48:07 GMT -5
There should be a new poetry forum for humorous poems! actaully, I was thinking that earlier after reading reaper's "reaper craps on christams '04" in the humor board...also, some of my poems are so sarcastic people start laughing when they read them...so I think another board for funny poetry would be ideal!
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cryingblood2
Crimson Soul
Born with no soul, lack of Control, cut from the mold of Antisocial
Posts: 117
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Post by cryingblood2 on Dec 17, 2004 11:27:23 GMT -5
thanks for your comments all you guys
and yeah all the capitalized words are her songs but the word CURIOUS is actually her perfume
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Post by Aish on Dec 17, 2004 14:38:45 GMT -5
Thanks, I needed a good laugh, this is priceless...you have a good eye for satire, cryingblood. :winkface: I agree, a humor board is a good idea.
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Post by carpenoctern on Jan 22, 2005 20:56:43 GMT -5
hehehehe... i really needed to read something like this. I loved that you worked in the names of some of her songs and even the name of her perfume sorry, my sister uses that stuff and it makes me gag when i smell it. Thanks for the laughs
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Post by perplexed on Jan 25, 2005 22:42:26 GMT -5
i love it...*laughs*
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queenie
Demon Disciple
Timor mortis conturbat me.
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Post by queenie on Jan 28, 2005 17:28:29 GMT -5
Lmao...more poetry should be written depicting Britney's timely demise.
Q
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Post by Reaper696 on Jan 28, 2005 19:07:42 GMT -5
Die Britney, die. I like this one, now to get on Ashlee's ass...
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