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Sober
Dec 22, 2005 2:52:26 GMT -5
Post by Hyde on Dec 22, 2005 2:52:26 GMT -5
Drugs can be a lonely place when living a willing dysfunctional existence, "exist" even being too strong a word. Yet without this delusional fixation, reality can be worse.
I'm burning these memories numb with a chemical serenade rocking me into apathy. This regretful mind choking as it drowns itself in ecstasy. Its better than sleep, a complete internal absence leaving my emotions crippled.
Blue lights dimming in and out.... Song on repeat, lyrics far past coherent.... Call me a slave to fantasy.
Slowly the enemy clarity sets in forcing me human, fragile and in control. Memories tap on my shoulder, plaguing me whether I am awake or asleep, they've been waiting till I was sober.....
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Sober
Dec 22, 2005 2:56:31 GMT -5
Post by shamefulsean on Dec 22, 2005 2:56:31 GMT -5
o gawed....**falls in love with piece*** yay for MDMA ...i love the last stanza.. this is a phenomenol((gah spelling)) write... wicked bad work
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DarkenTheSky
Demon Disciple
Beneath the Watery Lust Garden, my Secret Lies. . .
Posts: 392
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Sober
Dec 22, 2005 4:36:57 GMT -5
Post by DarkenTheSky on Dec 22, 2005 4:36:57 GMT -5
easy to relate to, not neccessarily with mdma, but i know the feeling all too well. "chemical serenade" was a nice description. "Call me a slave to fantasy", i liked that alot as well, it puts drugs in a different perspective, more positive i suppose, less evil, more understandable. "Memories tap on my shoulder, plaguing me whether I am awake or asleep, they've been waiting till I was sober....." another thing i relate to all too well. i try not to do drugs to forget things because then it leads to my abuse there is something in the first stanza that seems awkward, i think its the second line, yet im unsure exactly what it is. i think that its the work being. . . other than that, i loved it. effective how u explained why you're doing it, what the expirience is like, and then the outcome.
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Sober
Apr 18, 2006 2:45:09 GMT -5
Post by MusicalMasterpiece on Apr 18, 2006 2:45:09 GMT -5
undeniably GREAT. it is a phenominal writing. i wouldnt change much, if any at all. this is because i see your writing of this experience as a personal image. if i were to impose my critique on it, it wouldnt be yours, and it would be altered from YOUR perspective...i adored the fact of a beginning, middle, and an end, instead of just being informative
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Sober
Apr 24, 2006 20:58:28 GMT -5
Post by Time_Spinner on Apr 24, 2006 20:58:28 GMT -5
my mind is now freed. i bow down to your talent. im not worthy.
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