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Post by x__powerABUSE on Jun 11, 2005 22:55:07 GMT -5
“No More Goodbyes”
Cripple my psyche.
Rid me of my reason. The walls crumble around me.
This is the last chance to mend these broken ties.
And when I leave this time, There will be no more goodbyes.
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Post by Aish on Jun 14, 2005 1:33:45 GMT -5
Hey, this is a bitchin' format. I think you should take out 'my' in "Rid me of my reason". Nice little rant.
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Post by DarkCloud on Jun 25, 2005 11:27:32 GMT -5
Greetings! yup just take out my. and whats up with the format? its unique!
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EbonyKiss
Dark Initiate
.:Beautifully Twisted:.
Posts: 54
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Post by EbonyKiss on Jun 25, 2005 16:59:54 GMT -5
Love the format! Very different! And works wonderfully with the word of the poem. Seemingly so simple yet full of meaning and depth. Great piece
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Post by x__powerABUSE on Jun 25, 2005 19:43:19 GMT -5
Thank you all!! =)
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