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Post by Forsaken on Dec 22, 2003 22:12:21 GMT -5
Listen to this Like usual My life was shit Living for my parents Wasn't even worth it I've been twisted and used Confused and abused Lied to f*cked with My mind messed with My heart torn out Ripped to pieces But my future was about to change I went to a website Met a girl And with a chance of might She changed my life I no longer need my knife Even though I'm not with her yet I hope she'll be my wife Yes she's out of sight I'd always treat her right We've both gone through shit Been down in the pits But I've lifted her out of it At least I've tried And I've cried With happiness Because I love her I hope she feels the same She calls me insane Because I love her It's hard to explain But I do I'll always feel the same
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Post by black jewelled rain on Dec 22, 2003 22:19:17 GMT -5
I like the internal rhyming! Very clever. And it's so cute!!!! I can really feel your emotion. It's very beautiful. I also like the contrast bewteen past and present, with the poem being roughly half and half.
Thankyou *hugs*
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Post by Lina Inverse on Dec 23, 2003 0:43:36 GMT -5
I can relate so well to the first part of this. The second part..... Well, I'm not in love, and as far as I know, the girl I'm closest to being in love with hasn't had quite as bad a past as your girl.
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