Waste Land

[mistyowls2moons]

Listen to what I'm thinking, as my ears burn you're death.
Do you feel every inch of the boiling puss waiting patiently to explode the every existence in your life?
You and you the ones to burn in hell.
As I hold a cold bucket of water just to tempt
'you and you' with a hint of cool sensation.....pouring it to the ground.
Feel what I'm writing as each letter scratches you're dry dying scared skin..Flaking away like ashes, soot.
You, yes you're the ones, Gods wrath will be felt in full ,Soulless mistaken lives who pollute up the world and childrens minds.
Hear what I feel as the wind freezes you still.
For one tiny moment if even a given minute.
'You and you' will feel calmness a sense of pleasure,....
then a sudden crash as you're blown to pieces.

Summer Year 2002
StarfireFox

[Lina Inverse]

Hmmmm........ It's very angry and powerful..... But the rhythm is..... nonexistent. I guess it sort of adds to the wild, rampant anger, but I think it's sort of overdone.

[Evil Amerigo]

Its very powerful. The style in which it is written sort of inexplicably chilled me. I can't really pinpoint what element caused this, but the way it is written it seems like its like some curse that dooms those it is cast at.

Although, somehow the last few lines seemed a little weaker as compared to the first half. It's barely noticeable since the feeling established in the first half carries over to the second.

[mistyowls2moons]

You could say this was a powerful emotion and I had deep hatered then , lets just say 'they' messed with my children and and my life and sometimes the power of spoken word goes without saying. But so does Karma,, ,,,,thanks for the reply's