RobbedofPurity
Dark Initiate
im sorry, i really felt that, you felt so much more
Posts: 63
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Post by RobbedofPurity on Apr 3, 2004 0:52:24 GMT -5
Everything about you sickens me you flirtation, emancipation of the senses, extasy flows from tightening pores or i die inside
Slit my wrists and put me on display, thats all you ever wanted right? just a trophey for your case im just another pretty face
But Im not just another f*ck, I guess its just bad luck because you found me and I dont fade away,
Im unforgetable
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Post by deranged85 on Apr 3, 2004 2:54:03 GMT -5
great in-your-face vent. i really liked the ending with the crossed out words. creative. some of the words and phrases you chose to use in the last two stanzas seem very cliche, but you have made them your own, which is a difficult thing to do.
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Post by Lina Inverse on Apr 23, 2004 20:53:39 GMT -5
Powerful imagery and emotions. You might want go back and check for spelling mistakes, though.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Apr 24, 2004 17:39:35 GMT -5
how did i let myself read this without leaving a comment when you first posted it!?
great work, robbedofpurity. i agree with lina.. this is a very strong write. wicked emotion.
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Post by Kitten on May 2, 2004 13:49:21 GMT -5
I liked this piece. And so I won't repeat what everyone else said. Good job.
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