WOTE
Dark Initiate
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Post by WOTE on Nov 9, 2003 4:33:53 GMT -5
Have I achieved or mastered the anything that matters on the earth? We shall see what the lord God says, to find words of wroth.
Dash the waters against the walls of hierarchy and see them fall. Send the winds of fire and rain, to wash away the tears of gold’s misfortunes.
Harm not the lands of promise that have been washed in evils blood. Cruse the ones that sang of death on the edge of profit for ones own.
Banish the hardhearted foes of evenhandedness to the sands of waste. With they staff I strike the ground once to bring forth the fires.
With they staff I strike the ground again to see the waters. You without words, awoken the eagle of the west to your doom.
Blinded by the sun she swoops down on you to take your life. While you sing songs of victory, war comes to your door.
Not once, not twice, but three times shall you feel the sting of claws. Left as a desert, flat as the open calm sea, shall be you reward.
And the sword of ink shall devour your soul into the abyss of void Silence fell in the deepness of your heart, naively you sold your spirit.
Vow less is your knife for it is faceless without cause, hidden in covert. And when you rise, you shall see gold and diamonds, only for a short time.
Here comes the woeful warring winds, comes the woeful warring winds. The time is near, the horsemen I see bearing down on the earth from sea to bloody sea.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Nov 9, 2003 13:20:54 GMT -5
breath-taking. i found the last two stanzas to be f*cking incredible.. "from sea to bloody sea."
wonderful job, i look forward to more.
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Post by Mistress on Dec 22, 2003 23:30:00 GMT -5
Your imagery is incredible. I love your word use and structure...
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WOTE
Dark Initiate
Posts: 39
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Post by WOTE on Dec 23, 2003 1:30:16 GMT -5
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AxXis
Crimson Soul
I know the pale thing in the darkest of places.
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Post by AxXis on Dec 31, 2003 23:57:32 GMT -5
This was a good write. I really like the imagery in it. At the beginning the use of the word wroth instead of wrath interested me right off the bat. I think it is always good to change up and use a different bit of english, especially about anger. Thanks for sharing.
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