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march
Mar 2, 2005 20:25:21 GMT -5
Post by Morning March on Mar 2, 2005 20:25:21 GMT -5
You played with your strings, they made no sound A whisper fled through water falling down Concrete cracked through nature
You seem so tired, sinking, lying face down Shivers in an empty street on crumbling ground Entwining vines, find your face
You watched the lights fall asleep, come down Like misled fleets, the streetcar comes round A lobotomy, fleeing down the street
You dream blue eyes, brown hair, falling out Cop lights cut your back, they lash your mouth Surgeon, follow me, into the floor
Under empty parking lots, the mess is swept Alone, a burning candle A tattered bus seat talks, the sounds drowned out Directionless vandal
And oh, the song goes on And oh, we march slowly along And oh, can’t even hear the song Even though the march wears on
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march
Mar 2, 2005 21:20:46 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Mar 2, 2005 21:20:46 GMT -5
for some reason, I really liked this...I mean, really liked this. But I can't really say why...guess I'm tired...I'll check back tomorrow.
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march
Mar 5, 2005 21:48:57 GMT -5
Post by Morning March on Mar 5, 2005 21:48:57 GMT -5
hey thanks for the positive words...
its just funny that no one really gives feedback as to why they like the songs...
oh welll...
-matt
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march
Mar 6, 2005 14:58:53 GMT -5
Post by Yossarian on Mar 6, 2005 14:58:53 GMT -5
unfortunately, most people steer clear of the lyrics section for some reason...leash says it's because since she doesn't write lyrics, she has trouble critiquing...
...I have to post my songs in the poetry board if I want to get any feedback...
It's odd, this was featured for a short while, but got absolutely no feedback. congrats on the feature anyways.
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