Daemonized
Crimson Soul
There are noises in the dark ... the owners of which ... are better not to behold
Posts: 138
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Post by Daemonized on Jan 18, 2005 23:11:44 GMT -5
Greetings,
Not sure if I posted this one already ... if I have, sorry, but read it again anyway damnit, hehe.
SYNTHETIC
Collapsed under the strain of subjection without destiny without identity Twisted ways of discipline (that left us) the victims of hypocrisy
A complex process from the past a moment of godless insanity An experimental holocaust (that left us) at the mercy of technology
Biochemical narcotic tortured will Remanufactured logic for the killing fields This control … that leaves us synthetic
This is not what we foresaw dissection chaos assimilation This remnant of our wars (that leaves us) on the edge of extinction
Biochemical narcotic our tortured will Remanufactured logic for the killing fields This control … that leaves us synthetic
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Jan 19, 2005 4:13:02 GMT -5
i love the diction in this piece.. very effective. works well with the tone/mood. you have become one of my favourite writers here.
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Post by Yossarian on Jan 19, 2005 16:52:14 GMT -5
your writings are intense and powerful, and this is no exception...I agree with leash, you are defintely one of the best writers on here, most of your pieces are flawless...
nice work!
yoss
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pipes
Dark Initiate
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Post by pipes on Jan 19, 2005 18:40:21 GMT -5
i can't entierly agree with blackphoenix and yossarian, but only cause this is the first of yours that i've read. it is good, but what kinda song would it be? (what genre, if it fits one well)
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Daemonized
Crimson Soul
There are noises in the dark ... the owners of which ... are better not to behold
Posts: 138
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Post by Daemonized on Jan 19, 2005 23:28:04 GMT -5
I have to admit ... I love being someone's favourite writer ... it's not an ego thing, it just feels darn cool (so I'll like it while it lasts). My thanks once more for the nice words.
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Post by carpenoctern on Feb 3, 2005 22:06:24 GMT -5
powerful, thought provoking and dripping with imagery. You don't see that much in songs anymore.
~the victims of hypocrisy~ ah, I loved that one line, it could stand alone in my opinion.
~A complex process from the past a moment of godless insanity An experimental holocaust (that left us) at the mercy of technology~
wow, I don't know exactly what to say about this. godless insanity.... experimental holocaust... dripping with imagery and atmosphere
I loved this
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Post by dyinginside on Apr 17, 2005 5:48:03 GMT -5
are you influenced by the band fear factory by any chance ?
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