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Post by tearsofblood on Jul 31, 2004 9:24:44 GMT -5
Verse 1:
I feel these pains going through my brain, and I feel these pains they are never the same. I feel you crying although it does'nt show, and I feel you denying what feelings you want to show.
Chorus:
So, let it all out, let it all out. Tell me what's wrong with your song. Cause all I know are the things you tell me, and I cant see inside you to see what is wrong.
Verse 2: (not complete)
And it's been so long since Ive heard your song. So, sing it again and tell me what's wrong.
Chorus*2:
So, let it all out, let it all out. Tell me what's wrong with your song. Cause all I know are the things you tell me, and I cant see inside you to see what is wrong.
Note:
This is part of another song I wrote. It's not very good, but I expect to hear at least a few or all of your opinions.
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Aug 3, 2004 12:53:02 GMT -5
hmm.. im not sure about this piece.. it just doesnt really do much for me. im sure that this will sound quite good with some actual music to the lyrics. :smileyface: let us see the rest when you have it finished.
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Post by Yossarian on Oct 16, 2004 19:34:58 GMT -5
So, let it all out, let it all out. Tell me what's wrong with your song. Cause all I know are the things you tell me, and I cant see inside you to see what is wrong. Verse 2: (not complete) And it's been so long since Ive heard your song. So, sing it again and tell me what's wrong. Not really sure what to think. The chorus and verse 2 are pretty much saying the same thing as it stands...maybe you could combine them and write a different second verse? Cheers, Yossarian
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