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Post by Morning March on Jul 17, 2004 23:50:51 GMT -5
Bargain Prices
At home in my concrete heaven Carbon copied cancerous heart Shaking cell phone speed dial seven All you can fit in your shopping cart
f*cking filthy ritualistic measure Super size your f*cking demise Scour your veins for hidden treasure I wanted more with my side of fries
Throughout, the swamp the lights glow bright Sinful excuses create prolific white Angelic beings keep me running Keep your distance, survive the night
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Jul 20, 2004 3:37:00 GMT -5
ive read this over several times now, but i still dont have anything good enough to comment with. this piece was definately well done, i just cant pick out what exactly it was that i liked. i hope that someone else will be able to leave you some better feedback..
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Post by ruination on Jul 22, 2004 19:35:30 GMT -5
i love how natural the rhymes sound, how well it flows, and the overall tone. great expression of emotion.
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