WOTE
Dark Initiate
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Post by WOTE on Nov 9, 2003 4:39:21 GMT -5
I can see your eyes, haunting my soul. I can see your eyes, wanting my soul. And everybody wants a piece of your soul. And everybody wants a taste of your soul.
I can see your eyes, looking for the means. I can see your eyes, hearing the screams. And everybody wants to see your dreams. And everybody wants to be in your dreams.
I can see your eyes, loving them so. I can see your eyes, holding them close. And everybody wants your children too. And everybody wants your freedom too.
I can see your eyes, scanning the room. I can see your eyes, healing the wounds. And everybody wants to harbor your goals. And everybody wants to enslave your road.
I can see your eyes, haunting my soul. I can see your eyes, wanting my soul. But here comes the sun shining though. But here comes the sun shining though. But here comes the sun shining though. But here comes the sun shining though.
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Post by Lina Inverse on Nov 22, 2003 18:44:01 GMT -5
Wow, wow, wow!!!!!!!!!!!
I loved the near-repetition of each and every line. And then the exact repetition of the ending. It was neither too little nor too much. (Just don't take that to mean you can use this much repetition in every poem, cause it usually would be too much. This one is just special for some reason. It works.)
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WOTE
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Post by WOTE on Nov 22, 2003 21:26:14 GMT -5
i will have to give you the link when the song is finished recording
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Mistress
Demon Disciple
Eternally Damned
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Post by Mistress on Dec 16, 2003 18:57:18 GMT -5
Very well done. Usually I hate constant repitition, but in this case, it's perfect. I'd really like to hear it once it is recorded ^.^
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WOTE
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Post by WOTE on Dec 17, 2003 7:19:43 GMT -5
Well the demo is done, but i did not like the ending, The new one will be realy by Chrismas. At my music site. www.soundclick.com/bands/4/mesadivulamusic.htmBut you will have to join the site to here it. it was the only place i could find that would aloud the space. so keep you eyes and ears open..... ;D
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