awesome chorus. it really works well with your lyrics. there are a few parts that sound a bit off.. not anything big, just minor things that stand out.
i copied your poem and highlighted the areas that had sounded strange to me. these are just suggestions.. not alterations or anything. its your poem, i just wanted to give you ideas if you were looking for them.
==At The Gates==
By: bamelin
What should I do? I'm stuck in the center of
you allWhat should I say?
No longer do I want to playLife is a big game
alrightBut
there are so many losersI know some winners but they've found a way
A way to put the rules at their convenience
I'm at the gates
I must decide what to do
I don't want to end up this way
Should I jump or should I stay?
Faith is the only thing not pushing me away...
Y'all engulfing me with your thoughts
What do you want me to do?
So many years with no goal
It's like wandering around
Without recognizing all the people you know
It's so
frustrating to see that with every effort I do
With all the effort I put in, I drown a little bit more
I'm at the gates
I must decide what to do
I don't want to end up this way
Should I jump or should I stay?
Faith is the only thing not pushing me away...
I need a guide
Someone to light my lantern
Those gates are opening
But am I ready to go there?
I'm at the gates
I must decide what to do
I don't want to end up this way
Should I jump or should I stay?
Faith is the only thing not pushing me away...
Your faith in me will make me stay...