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Post by jyrascarn on Aug 29, 2003 9:26:30 GMT -5
I never landed on the moon But I landed on you I've climbed the mountains of Venus And shot my bolt into the blue
Gonna irradiate you forever Observe your mutation bursting through Invade your personal afterlife Make you a bride, one of the crew
Set the controls For the heart of me I'll call Houston Lose contact and set you free I'm your lover Your first contact with new life And exploding on impact Is the only remedy
I challenge you And you discover me Let's seek out Atlantis And ask Apollo to tea Then I'll strip you See all the stars that shine inside So, let's consider the universe And still enjoy the ride
I never landed on Jupiter The gravity's too great Still, I'm saddled with your excess baggage Full of stars You carry weight
Stowaway on board my heart Make my conspiracy theory come true I'll sentence you to my decompression chamber And let the f*ck suck you out into the blue
I'll collect your precious tidbits Reassemble you with my cosmic glue Clone you beyond redemption Make you the superior creature In my cosmic zoo
And so, I never really landed on Venus The sluts there are too irate But I've landed on the planet of the vampires Suck my blood And puke at the gate
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This is just one of many dark songs I've penned, most of which have already been set to music (this one hasn't) ... so, hope you like it - it's set to explode!
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Post by _black phoenix_ on Sept 3, 2003 2:38:55 GMT -5
wow.. definately unique. i really liked these parts.. "then ill strip you see all the stars that shine inside" "still, im saddled with your excess baggage full of stars you carry weight" "ill collect your precious tidbits reassemble you with my cosmic glue" cool lyrics. i look forward to more. oh, and by the way.. theres an area made especially for lyrics.. its not a big deal, but just try to post them there for next time.
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Post by jyrascarn on Sept 5, 2003 3:48:06 GMT -5
Destroy the rings of Saturn. They may create a pattern!
Thanx, Leash. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Post by black jewelled rain on Oct 13, 2003 13:21:20 GMT -5
You've obviouslt done your homework! There are alot of very interesting references in this poem. For example, mentions of Atlantis, Apollo and Venus, and even vampires at the end.
In the fourth stanza, I wanted to mention that I loved the imagery of opening someone up to see all the stars inside. It made me think of being able to see the entire universe inside a single person. It's a brilliant idea, and I love the imagery of the beauty of the stars. And you mention it again later, which I liked.
I wish I could hear it set to music!
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