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Post by monapentacle666 on Feb 11, 2018 13:32:20 GMT -5
There is a woman in red beneath a willow tree now she is standing on my grave I wonder who she is she fades into mist and I'am left wonder. I have come to believe I'am going insain after dream after dream but this no dream because now know her face and she is me. This is my grave and I'am now a creature or ghost maybe I'am both I'am so tired now I must go to sleep as death and darkess washes over me bloody dresses and bloody kisses bring me close to hell's doors once more. The moonlight overhead brings me triple the sin and dubble the death all I know is that I'am lost and can't be found find my body burn the killer all is lost the time is very near to hunt why is this my terriable fate I will make people into bones and this is my work.
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sik
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Post by sik on Apr 12, 2019 15:39:15 GMT -5
kind of fail spelling and grammar but still enthralling poetry, try using grammarly
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Post by SynFigmentum on Aug 24, 2019 6:21:04 GMT -5
Interesting read, aside from the spelling errors now and then. I enjoyed it, though i found the run on sentence nature of it to be a bit jarring. It might read better if given a better format, to allow for it to have more impact line to line, verse to verse.
Example: (Just an idea of how i would format this had i written it.
There is a woman in red beneath a willow tree now she is standing on my grave I wonder who she is she fades into mist I'am left wonder I have come to believe I'am going insane after dream after dream this no dream because now i know her face she is me This is my grave and I'am now a creature or ghost maybe I'am both I'am so tired, now I must go to sleep as death and darkess washes over me bloody dresses and bloody kisses bring me close to hell's doors once more The moonlight overhead brings me triple the sin and double the death all I know is that I'am lost can't be found find my body burn the killer all is lost the time is very near to hunt why is this my terrible fate I will make people into bones this is my work.
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