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Post by Veritas on Feb 3, 2016 20:29:22 GMT -5
I hide from myself curled up, inside detached from myself devouring myself dissecting & dividing inciting & fighting "myself" growing tired & worn out by myself there's no denying myself... matches... gasoline... igniting ...myself
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Post by twistedangel on Feb 6, 2016 8:09:35 GMT -5
Usually I wouldn't like this kinda write, all ending on the same word...I'd argue its a bit lazy, but this seems to work really well
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Post by Aish on Mar 4, 2016 22:17:55 GMT -5
Consider dropping the final "myself" down on a line by itself.
Any chance you're open to excising "myself" from L2-L5, then adding parenthesis around said word in L6?
I feel similar to this lately.
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Post by Veritas on Mar 5, 2016 13:36:57 GMT -5
* excellent * Thank you for the suggestions it flows so much smoother.
-LMS
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