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Post by LonelyForsaken on Apr 18, 2015 19:33:01 GMT -5
Everybody needs somebody wants somebody holds somebody through the dark night
Just not me
Lonelyforsaken
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Post by vincentaugustemanet on Apr 18, 2015 19:51:33 GMT -5
That pause is killer (i'm assuming its 'just not <pause> me')
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Apr 18, 2015 19:58:00 GMT -5
Thanks I think that is a better place for the pause
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Post by vincentaugustemanet on Apr 18, 2015 20:00:35 GMT -5
LOL, I can read I guess. Move it forward or don't. Igotnoideawhatsgoingon.jpg
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Post by twistedangel on Apr 19, 2015 13:39:37 GMT -5
This got me thinking about modern relationships in a way maybe YOU want sombody who also wants YOU but to ofen these days people are to concerned with trying to BE a somone Hmm hope that makes sense..maybe i should just of wrote, peoples to egocentric to care for another these days ? ☺
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Apr 19, 2015 20:11:20 GMT -5
My thoughts on this subject are as endless as the care I hold in my heart. “…peoples to egocentric to care for another these days ?” – Yes, there does seem to have been a shift of morals and beliefs in our modern society. The family unit is dead and independence is considered true strength. I observe a world where bad behavior is rewarded and good behavior is punished. I read an article yesterday where a woman in NY was fined $2,000.00 for feeding the homeless. The Kardashians are idolized. A poll taken recently asked Americans who they consider a family dynasty today, the number one answer was the Kardashians. It amkes me sick. IDK, but it seems I see this all the time; I want her, she wants him, he wants someone else, and on and on it goes. We do not value those that value us. Even I have been guilty of this. I met a woman that was about 15 years younger than myself who made it clear she was attracted to me on more than a physical level. I had many excuses for shunning her at the time though I was physically attracted to her. When I realized what a dumbass I was being I tried to rectify my mistake but it was too late. That was some 20+ years ago. I vowed to never make that mistake again. I vowed that I would take any chance that promised even a modicum of real companionship. I guess there is an expiration date. In that 20 years my ideals have fallen to the wayside. I must be a real asshole but what others tell me is the opposite. It is of little consolement in an endlessly empty bed and life. “maybe YOU want sombody who also wants YOU “ – How could it be any other way? Anything else is rape.
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Post by twistedangel on Apr 20, 2015 1:15:06 GMT -5
Rape !! Nooo is not wot I meant I mean like the fickleness of it, sure there's nothing wrong with sex just for fun an not want a relationship I meant the 'you' as somthing deeper...proper 'love' physical an spiritual
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Apr 20, 2015 2:19:47 GMT -5
There isn’t anything wrong with recreational sex as long as no promises are broken and feelings aren’t hurt over it. Particularly, when a friend is in need of comforting. I’m not prone to a puritan attitude and never have been but I’ve found that for me a certain amount of hollowness and guilt follows “mutual masturbation.” For me, even “just sex” should have some meaning beyond the rut.
“I meant the 'you' as somthing deeper...proper 'love' physical an spiritual” – That is, and always has been, my “ideal” goal. I’ve always been upfront about that belief and I have always made it obvious. It also seems to be a problem. Does it really make me so different and undesirable? My experience says it does but it is who I am even if I will die alone for sticking to this principle. I can’t change that about myself, I’ve tried. I’ve no skill in the art of seduction.
added; I feel I should have mentioned that I am a hopeless romantic and am as romantic as they come, if given the right kind of encouragement, but I know nothing of seduction. Two very different things IMO.
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Post by lewis82 on Aug 2, 2015 8:56:52 GMT -5
I love some of your other works, I'm reading... but this one was a bit too simple or short for my taste. Your comments in this thread more than make up for it, though.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Aug 2, 2015 20:51:06 GMT -5
Thanks again Lewis
I actually feel the exact same way about this one. I threw it up as a tribute to something a friend of mine here said to me in a PM to let that person know they are not alone in this feeling though the cause for this persons feelings are a little different. I thought “Surrender” would have gotten more attention than this one. This is short and simple and I really didn’t expect anyone to comment on it. I put no real thought or effort into it. When it gets as slow as it has been around here I tend to do things like this. I am very glad it received the attention it did precisely because of the resulting correspondence but mostly it is a hug of understanding and love for this one friend.
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Post by lewis82 on Aug 3, 2015 21:42:05 GMT -5
Well You're obviously talented and have a following, on here. I mean, once you earn a reputation... well a "picasso" type could throw a blob of paint on a canvas and it could be very worthwhile to look at, simply because we know he is great. Your output doesnt always have to be the best, because people already know that "the best" already dwells within you.
Seeing that this had an inside meaning and I am new here, I am humbled, because I really have no place to critique it.
Keep up the good work, LonelyForsaken.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Aug 4, 2015 3:34:11 GMT -5
Awwww, my head is swelling. LOL Every now and then I do very well but most of it is just ok IMO. There are some I don’t even want to admit I wrote. LOL
Don’t hesitate to comment. We all have trouble feeling worthy of giving constructive critique. I had a lot of trouble giving to Aish for the longest time because I think she is such a great writer (she is not the only one) but she gives so much that I had to learn to get over it. That also taught me to make the comments that I don’t really feel the author needs or should take at face value and just use the opportunity to teach or remind all readers of what we are really trying to do here.
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