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Post by gambler on Mar 2, 2015 17:37:48 GMT -5
So you wanna play a game?
_ How do you plan ta finish?
On Tues smile embellishment,
_ Next ignored again.
Do you think I'm having fun?
_ R U playin' for tha fame?
Ever we feel their aims, but
_ A real love ever overcomes.
----------------------------------- Only thing non-negotiable stonestonestone is that there are 8 lines and each of the first letters of the lines. The wordiness, espesh L7/8 is intentional, but maybe you think it fails.
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Post by gambler on Mar 4, 2015 17:37:23 GMT -5
This one went from dev to production so no feedback needed. thx
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Mar 5, 2015 17:25:21 GMT -5
“Only thing non-negotiable stonestonestone is that there are 8 lines and each of the first letters of the lines. The wordiness, espesh L7/8 is intentional, but maybe you think it fails. “ –
“This one went from dev to production so no feedback needed. Thx” – I'm getting mixed signals here. LOL The only part I have a problem with is here; “R U playin' for tha fame?”“tha” typo? The "Tues" thing was a slight stumbler but I got it quickly enough. LOL “A real love ever overcomes.” – I wish I could believe that again.
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Post by gambler on Mar 5, 2015 17:35:39 GMT -5
Nah not typo nor is L2's 'ta'
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Post by gambler on Mar 5, 2015 17:39:57 GMT -5
“Only thing non-negotiable stonestonestone is that there are 8 lines and each of the first letters of the lines. The wordiness, espesh L7/8 is intentional, but maybe you think it fails. “ –
“This one went from dev to production so no feedback needed. Thx” – I'm getting mixed signals here. LOL Well, I already put this one up on my facebook (the girl read it) The "Tues" thing was a slight stumbler but I got it quickly enough. LOL Heh, I see this now too, but 'two smile' was totally unintentional. I shortened it for the syllable count. “A real love ever overcomes.” – I wish I could believe that again. Ya, the whole point of the poem is that this girl ignored me and let barriers get in the way, so I knew it wasn't the real thing.
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