jmcc16
Dark Initiate
Posts: 42
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Post by jmcc16 on Mar 1, 2015 21:48:34 GMT -5
I was looking down into the ocean just now And I think I may have dropped it A bottle cap Sucked down to the bottom Left to rust among the shells
She will never come back to me She's found her way And I am still adrift The sun is my only solace There is no one else The rain comes now and again If only I could still look out a window and sip coffee And dream of her But the darkness has made me wet I smell ozone instead of her skin I taste nothing but blood and salt I wait here in the evidence A storm is coming I must find a way to survive
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Adrift
Mar 2, 2015 11:23:41 GMT -5
Post by twistedangel on Mar 2, 2015 11:23:41 GMT -5
i do like the conversational tone this has, tho not sure if i like the 'just now' bit at the end of S1L1..not decided yet am wondering tho in S2L11 instead of "I taste nothing but blood and salt" maybe "I taste nothing but brine", keeping it to the sea/ocean theme ?
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