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Post by twistedangel on Mar 2, 2015 11:31:14 GMT -5
mostly i really like this, but me one big crit with it is the use of 'pain' 3 times in such short succession, an in doing so kinda weakens the feeling a little maybe S2L2 could be reworked as "Returning to the familiar" leaving out 'pain' altogether ?
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Post by gambler on Mar 2, 2015 20:49:41 GMT -5
mostly i really like this +1 I like the structure and the rhythm of S2 so keep that imo. Liked S5/6 too, assuming I read it right.
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