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Post by twistedangel on Jan 10, 2015 4:29:56 GMT -5
* OMG found this collecting dust in some random file..is one of the first poems i ever wrote back in 2011 ...will say i have changed a couple of things tho ie 'a' to 'i' in B'ham UK I is prounounced as 'a' like apple not A as ay..if that makes sense , i did use to (still do somtimes) write how i speak...anyways i hope it makes you cringe as much as it did me LOL nothin to write nothin to say time ticks wastin away tried it failed it f*ck it me epitaph will read when i finally kick the bucket sick of bein despised sick of ya bullshit an lies go back into shadows away from haterz eyes thought i could renew thought i wos gettin thru wos never good enuff to join the clicky crew council house an violent C H A V an it dont matter wot i try an do is all i'll ever be to you sharpening the blade back to the life i never made your intolerance made me dreams fade next time we meet on the pavements of cruel street youll be bleeding at me feet but dont get uptight am just reverting back to stereotype so you can be the big man an proven right
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Jan 10, 2015 17:40:32 GMT -5
I think this should have gone into rage. “nothin to write nothin to say time ticks wastin away
tried it failed it f*ck it” – I know the feeling and I like your opening. “...anyways i hope it makes you cringe as much as it did me LOL” – Yah, but I have no problem with the way you speak. The rhyming though… eeww. A blast from the past. LOL You’re so much better than this now.
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Post by windfog on Jan 11, 2015 0:13:51 GMT -5
I agree with L.F. that you are much better by now. But it's an example - talent must be "polished". You did it. Many are not. I really enjoyed with reading - lady, you are great!
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Post by twistedangel on Jan 12, 2015 12:18:52 GMT -5
cheers Ris...tho about time LOL is only taken about 4 years
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jmcc16
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Post by jmcc16 on Feb 18, 2015 21:34:42 GMT -5
This feels like an anthem and I mean that as a big complement. Strength empowerment fun
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