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Post by Terrah_ko on Dec 2, 2014 14:50:59 GMT -5
Let the purity of the rain, Wash away my emotions taint. Make me white and holy, And fill my heart with love soley. Let the thunder rise from the sky; Eluminate the blackened night... Allow its greatness still my fears, And bring the silence to my ears.
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Dec 2, 2014 15:24:16 GMT -5
Post by Deleted on Dec 2, 2014 15:24:16 GMT -5
I really dig this one.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Dec 3, 2014 18:14:28 GMT -5
Wow! I really like this. I have a soft spot for silence and rain. A few suggestions for a polish; "Let the purity of the rain, (small w)Wash away my emotions taint. Make me white and holy,(End this line with a period) And (F)fill my heart with love soley(solely). Let the thunder rise from the sky; Eluminate(Illuminate) the blackened night... Allow its greatness to still my fears, (small a)And bring the silence to my ears." The bit of rhyming at the ending seems a very nice touch too. It's not overly done and seems to add just a bit more punch to it making it more memorable.
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Feb 22, 2015 3:38:34 GMT -5
Post by Bastet on Feb 22, 2015 3:38:34 GMT -5
This feels like an invocation or prayer for peace. I love it.
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