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Post by twistedangel on Mar 21, 2014 13:46:51 GMT -5
Ice cold Alice Lips full of lies, a hard kick habit Keep your eyes open wide Been many a mans shameful demise Ambush a tender, soft surprise
Ice cold Alice, sucks tears dry Visace dresses, a flash of thigh Inviting touch, a provocative sigh A dance in shadow, the ultimate high Voice of silk but snakes in her eye
Ice cold Alice, high society voodoo Pins her loves from pages of Who's Who Eat the rich, while their still alive de Milo arms, no ones yet survived
Ice cold Alice, cant be denied Charming claws tears you up inside A one night Aphrodite, untouchabley cool No names mind games, played like a fool Heartache soulbreak, viciously cruel
Yearn so long, for her return My Heroin lover, make my blood burn Knife twist open wrist, she took my all Ice cold Alice, without I cant endure Ice cold Alice, bones pile high, outside her door Ice cold Alice, she'll hypnotise Ice cold Alice, many a mans shameful demise
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Post by Aish on Apr 1, 2014 12:27:45 GMT -5
LSD? Sorry, when I see Alice or Lucy I think of LSD. That isn't a hard kick habit though. So, I can read this as both a drug and a person who cannot ever fill themself enough so they prey on others.
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Post by LonelyForsaken on Apr 1, 2014 16:07:23 GMT -5
My first thought was “Ice Queen” but… too cliché/obvious. Perhaps simply “Ice?” Aish – “LSD? Sorry, when I see Alice or Lucy I think of LSD. That isn't a hard kick habit though. So, I can read this as both a drug…” – Reminds me of that Roxy Music song LOL “…and a person who cannot ever fill themself enough so they prey on others.” – A double edged sword. Her victims suffer the same problem but lack that something that can turn a victim into a predator.
A nice attempt Angel and you have my sympathies. I’ve tried to write this one myself but it just can’t be done very poetically it seems though this is better than my attempt. This would benefit (poetically) from a pairing down but this has a lyrical quality I like.
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Post by twistedangel on Apr 6, 2014 4:46:32 GMT -5
I actually wrote this as a song more than a poem...we named a certain somone at work Ice Cold Alice...she plays the more wealthy customers is a pun on a title of a old old film called Ice Cold in Alice Maybe if I concentrated on me actual job rather than making up stuff about horrid people id get the till to balance on day
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Post by Mikepoet on Jul 25, 2014 12:15:12 GMT -5
I also got drugs out of it. relative to my personal stuff is addictive nature sex and drugs one synanamous with other. like a bad speller misspells without spellcheck.
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Post by iconico on Jul 26, 2014 20:36:22 GMT -5
I read this and immediately though of my crystal meth use. It just seemed to carry for me because "Ice Cold Alice" like a way of saying crystal meth? Ice cold seems like a perfect fit for how she hits you and freezes you in her grasp.
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Post by mee on Jul 29, 2014 6:57:55 GMT -5
suck them dry and leave them less ice dry alice payin off her dress eatin out a rich flicked bottomless crack pay for the view of her cash slapped back swallow you whole in a liplicked trap :_)
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