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Post by Bastet on Apr 16, 2014 13:49:08 GMT -5
Thank you for the suggestions, Nibbana.
Audeamus, you are an astute reader. I felt like it was a nod to OCD, eating disorders, and any behaviors that destroy or emaciate someone in any capacity. It's like wielding violence against the Self, but not being able to stop it.
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Post by markusmagellus on Apr 16, 2014 15:31:15 GMT -5
Nice edit, girlie.
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Post by Bastet on Apr 17, 2014 12:58:09 GMT -5
Thank you.
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Post by brownjenkin on Apr 17, 2014 19:03:29 GMT -5
I like this poem because it's horrific and grotesque in a fairly subtle way, giving us strong images, but imbuing them with allegorical meaning. Thank you for the read. v2 Hungered I gnaw Could a comma go after "Hungered?" on denuded ribs I really like the use of the word denuded. for support
my stingy echoes lie when they plunk off empty walls, a begging bowl of cravings.
I will never be full.
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Post by Bastet on Apr 18, 2014 11:00:16 GMT -5
Comma added. Thank you, brownjenkin
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Post by goldfinch on Jul 12, 2014 12:48:19 GMT -5
Excellent writing!
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