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Post by markusmagellus on Nov 24, 2013 1:15:58 GMT -5
That old cliche about life being hard is a trueism, and workin' outside in the elements turns men to leather quick enough
but I never need remindin' to get lost in the scent and the luster and the silent silk of my woman's hair tumbling like the sea through my sun burnt hands.
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siksimon
Demon Disciple
Blind leading the blind.
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Post by siksimon on Nov 25, 2013 3:16:42 GMT -5
You have a knack for rhythm and subtlety, well thought out as well. Excellent.
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Post by nibbana on Nov 26, 2013 3:58:53 GMT -5
A man who appreciates that simple things are sometimes best things. Very sweet for your woman. Nice pretty piece.
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Post by Bastet on Nov 28, 2013 2:58:20 GMT -5
This is so pretty, without being overdone. I'm becoming a fan
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jekyll
Dark Initiate
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Post by jekyll on Nov 30, 2013 16:48:00 GMT -5
You tied everything up quickly without losing power or leaving us wanting more. Beautifully done.
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me
Crimson Soul
trying to land :_)
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Post by me on Apr 29, 2014 7:22:47 GMT -5
the toil brings you to the one you love , and the effort made in getting there is well spent :_)
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Post by markusmagellus on Apr 29, 2014 12:17:52 GMT -5
Thank you for the kind feedback everyone.
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Post by twistedangel on Apr 29, 2014 12:21:51 GMT -5
when i first read this i didnt quite get it...each stanza on its own yeah..but put together found i was missing it ?..probly still am but now am thinking the 'life is hard' bit is more about longterm relationships ? well it works in me own head anyways even if am totally wrong the wording of this is just adorable
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Nabi
Crimson Soul
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Post by Nabi on Aug 16, 2014 20:33:18 GMT -5
So simple and amazing! I truly love this piece!
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